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I want to feel you in my arms
You make my heart go off like car alarms
I think about you night and day
What can i say
I love you deep inside my heart
Where feelings cant be torn apart
I hope you feel the same for me
I just hope you see
The same as i do
The vision of loving you
Don't ever leave
Because,that would be the last time i breathe
I want to stare into your sparkling eyes
That never tell any lies
Please be by my side
So i don't have to hide
©2005-2009 ~HasteThisDay1212
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:iconlovespinsleft:
This is good; the rhyming works. It's funny that you should mention car alarms--I referenced one in a poem I wrote a couple weeks ago (bells & whistles & car alarms explode, somewhere in my head). It's just strange to see the same metaphor.

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:: never hesitate to speak of love, it cannot hurt you ::
:iconlovespinsleft:
(Sorry if this posts twice, my computer balked on me)-- I just wanted to say that I like the poem and that the rhyming works well in this. What's funny is that I used the same "car alarm" phrase in a poem I wrote a while back (bells & whistles & car alarms explode, somewhere in my head)--and it's just neat that the same metaphor was used here.

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:: never hesitate to speak of love, it cannot hurt you ::
:iconhastethisday1212:
Thanks a bunch^_^.Heh,cool.

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Matt
:iconpoke-teh-jello:
Why does everyone always talk about cars? I was watching a perfectly good show until my brother spoiled it by asking what kind of car what's-her-face's boyfriend had. o.0

Anyway, V-good. Again. *is starting to feel lowly*

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Credit Where Credit Is Due. :bow:
:icondesperate-bid:
just awesome

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ι'м jusт нeяe тo do мy тнing.
ι'м jusт нeяe тo вe мe. :hexentanz: :star:
:iconiluvreplay:
beautiful!
=D

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98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this
if u want to cut yourself remember that i luv u
if u want to kill yourself remember that i luv u
I luuuuv My Chemical Romance!!!!!!!
:iconallya4sab:
This is beautiful!! I love it and really describes true love xxx

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"When people come together as redheads, they just look at each other,they have a certain bond. And I think this whole event will some day expand to multiple events, maybe across the world. I think the ginger community will start."

"Live love and laugh"
:iconaquaridragon:
That made me well up ^^ Great poem its so true

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See, that are of good, as a living, breathing, feeling being, let compassion glow in each, which can stop letting evil and blindness breed, in one by one, starting from somewhere here, people. Hearts & minds with peace, enlightnment, if they can realise.
:iconontae1986:
that was beuatiful.

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War!!! War!!! and More War!!! This world is at war and when it destroys itself in its blind rage, then my mission will be complete,but what is left for me?

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